Harmonygirl wrote:The first thing I noticed was your intro - "I hope I am not wasting your time"
YOU ARE NOT!!!!!!
I would remove that line or change it to "You've come to the right place" or "look no further" something along those lines....
I will have to agree with Shannon on this, not a good intro. You mention here "my baby", so it must have meant a lot to you, why not talk about that in the first paragraph.
I will show this to my 7 year old today, to see how he reacts to it. He still won't go down to the basement alone, because that's where our monsters live. They seem to be immune to the big red sign on the door that says: "No Monsters Allowed".
Maybe you could add a few interesting or funny quotes from kids and parents on the first page. The reviewer might be interested in that.
Like Shannon says "Scholastic" might be a good fit, they publish many funny, nicely illustrated children's books. Yours falls in this category. Good luck!