sketch with ink pen #4

[kymo]

i challenged myself and i don't like the hair... any tips maybe?

[Endlessfun]

Actually hair - its good as iot is and in harmony with the treatment elsewhere

[rhknigh]

I don't know what you don't like about the hair... is it intended to represent light color hair? If so it looks fine. However if this is to be dark hair color then you should use the white only as highlights. Also looks stiff the parts that stick out, like hair-sprayed or styled to be that way. If you are going for a more "blowing in the wind" look then I would suggest you put some flowing lines instead of stiff spiky bits. Even if those are to be flyaway hairs they are looking like whole locks of hair that are sticking together and sticking out. Let me know what way you are going with it.

Also 2nd one from top has a line going from distal trajectory as opposed to proximal (which would be coming from her head). Do you mean to have a little swatch flying toward her from out of nowhere? Otherwise it could I suppose be a chunk that has come loose... it bothers me.

Your face is very well done. I just dug into the hair as you noted it was something of a concern. Hope I am being helpful in my critique, I don't mean to be harsh, just frank.

[ehoeveler]

Hair works with this - Really nice! Thanks, E

[nigelartist]

No....a nice sketch. Fresh and windswept.

Well done. I like the hair.

[kymo]

thx for the feedback the problem must be me then i guess ;p

[nigelartist]

The eyes are of different size and look odd to me. Sorry.

[Kristian_Saapunki]

Nice sketch. But i also have a small problem whit the hair. There is to much white in the upper right part of the hair if you ask me. The hair dosent look to be following the shape of the head.

Other then that good work! keep em coming!

[jenn_iam]

I think for a pen and Ink.. the hair is fine as it is... for this peice... having the texture adds the feeling of motion which I believe you were trying to convey anyway ... wind blowing etc.. this is a good application of that. Trust your instincts!

[Jenny Geldart]

maybe just a couple more bolder black areas through the hair for some more depth - I know it is always hard to know when to stop, otherwise I like this drawing